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C2 Sample Essay 39 (School or family shapes one's personality)

In the minds of ESL exam candidates, e ssay writing is one of the most daunting tasks they are required to complete, regardless of the level of the exam, the administering body or the ease with which they themselves use the language. The same applies to students who are asked to write an essay by their teachers at school.  In the previous sample essays posted on the blog, the main point I stress is the need to become acquainted with this form of writing (as opposed to writing a letter, review or report, for instance), to get a feel of what authorial voice is and how to organize and progressively express the arguments you wish to make in a coherent manner.  Unfortunately, the best way to prepare for exam writing or learn how to write good essays for school is to read as many essays from as many sources as possible, then write as

Short Story Sample - The Haunted House

 This is a sample short story based on a typical B2-level English exam (e.g. First for Schools or the former FCE exam, ESB or LRN) which requires candidates to write a narrative of approximately 200 words. 

 

It is, naturally, appropriate for creative writing assignments as well -- especially early October, with Halloween right round the corner -- that should give students and teachers alike the opportunity to get ideas. Ideally, it should be used to show students and ESL / EFL exam candidates what is expected of them when they encounter this type of question, even though it is rather lengthier than required. 

 

As you read, note the various elements a short story should have: dialogue, use of adjectives and adverbs to create atmosphere, use of the senses, organization of paragraphs, conflicts that heighten the action, narrator, and the like. 

 

For further information, read my post Writing Stories: Where to Start. It should help you tackle a story from the ground up and make you aware of the different things that should be included so that the story is worth reading.


The assignment is a simple one: Write a story entitled The Haunted House. Based on this simple rubric, the following tale was produced. Enjoy!


The Haunted House

 

It was a cold October evening and it had just started drizzling on the sleepy country village I lived in. I was coming back from soccer practice, exhausted after the drills and our coach had kept us longer than usual so night had already fallen on the deserted streets surrounding my school. My house was ten blocks away and all the other kids had left in their parents’ cars. My favorite TV show was about to begin, so I decided to take a short cut through the fields I had never taken before. Little did I know what that decision would bring.

        As I trudged wearily up the hill, I almost felt the icy wind telling me to stop and go back, but reaching the top and looking down, I saw the warm lights of my house far away to my right among my neighbors’ cottages. What I also saw took my breath away. A large ghastly-looking mansion fell right across my path downhill and there was no other way for me to get home but through the overgrown garden surrounding it.

        I crept warily among patches of rotting vegetables as I inspected the outside of this colossal building, its gray walls covered in ivy and dark windows with broken shutters drooping on rusty hinges. The silence seemed as thick as fog, coating everything and everyone near the house. Glad to reach the garden’s wrecked outer wooden fence that no longer stood, I told myself it was just my imagination playing tricks on me that made me so nervous. What a silly fool I must seem to a bystander. It was at that moment I heard a low moan coming from the depths of the house behind me, which grew stronger with every step I took, until it became a piercing shriek.

        I ran. I ran as fast as my tired legs would carry me. I ran until I reached the safety of the lit street that led to my house. I must have been panting so hard that old Mr. Jones, the village eccentric, who was just coming out of his barn, stopped and asked me if I was okay. I told him about the house. “Ah, you saw it too then,” he said with a crazed look in his eyes. “Only few have seen it. Only those the house chooses are the unlucky few. Go tomorrow and it won’t be there, but know that once it’s let you seen it, it won’t let you go.” With that, he turned. “Wait, Mr. Jones,” I cried chasing after him. “What do you mean it won’t let you go?”






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